Chapter 7: Page 26

posted 28th May 2018, 11:59 PM

Chapter 7: Page 26
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28th May 2018, 11:59 PM

zerothe3rd

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29th May 2018, 6:14 AM

Delta-v

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Oh, shoot, out of mana.

Too many failed attacks.

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29th May 2018, 5:42 PM

zerothe3rd

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Oh my, I see what you mean! I didn't mean for it to look like her mana was getting weaker; in fact her pool is much larger that it is suppose to be.

My intend was to make it look like she was having a hard time controlling the fire magic but managed it control it. Maybe a few words on the page could help...

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29th May 2018, 7:46 PM

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It might get the point across better if the expressions in Panel 6 and Panel 10 were switched.

I read Panel 6 as determination, and Panel 10 as terror. Also, if she were going to use the fire spell I wouldn't have expected her to damp it out entirely.

Or you could add a couple of words--whichever is easier. :)

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31st May 2018, 6:43 PM

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Hmmm. I think the next page will fix the problem! I might still go back and add a word bubble though; thanks!

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