Chapter 7: Page 11

posted 13th Feb 2018, 1:02 AM

Chapter 7: Page 11
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13th Feb 2018, 1:02 AM

zerothe3rd

This page took a lot longer that I expected it to.

EDIT: As a heads up I'll be out of state next week on post day. I should have access to a computer so I can upload but there is a chance it'll be Wednesday or something. The page is already done.

SECOND EDIT: It was a little confusing what was actually damaging the creature. Even though the perspective is a it... off. I added Kyoni's Shotgun to it is more obvious that the slugs are hitting it; thanks for those who noticed it was a bit hard to follow!

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13th Feb 2018, 7:22 PM

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14th Feb 2018, 2:10 AM

zerothe3rd

It was suppose to be Slugs from the shotgun Kyoni has... but I think maybe I need to add the barrels in the shot to make sense. hmm.

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14th Feb 2018, 5:59 PM

Triex_Q12

You did set up the sequence in which she gets her shotgun ready to fire in the previous page you made. But with Lilith doing her magic in the midst of all this chaos(I mean hey can't magic go "boom boom" as well?) It could be quite confusing without seeing a "smoking gun".

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14th Feb 2018, 6:05 PM

Triex_Q12

Also what did she get stuck too? was the piping system or the bug?I felt like we missed an extra panel.
Love the bug explosion though. Definitely want to see how they all get out of this.

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15th Feb 2018, 9:06 PM

zerothe3rd

@TRIEX_Q12
The last page shows her cloak was pinned by the bug's sharp arm. it is still holding it down, thus the rip.

However, you guys were very right about how confusing the page was. I added a little bit of her shotgun to clear up the confusion! Thanks a ton for pointing out the issue; it makes so much sense now!

Figuring out how the 'innards' would look was fairly fun too.

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15th Feb 2018, 9:07 PM

zerothe3rd

@CHIPPEWA GHOST
I did an edit so it actually looks like it's Kyoni's shotgun doing the damage; thanks for bringing up the vagueness of the page! It was really helpful to think about for future pages!

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